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　　As more and more people entrust their private data to internet organizations, there is an impending trend that their information is obtained by third parties (i.e. banks, shopping websites). While its benefits are championed by companies, I will say its potential pitfalls in terms of data security deserve equal attention as well.

　　From a positive perspective, the information disclosure is applauded by commercial organizations. One of the merits can be seen from the economic perspective: by tracking and collecting individuals’ credit records, financial agencies can better assess customers’ credibility, thus mitigating potential pitfalls to a large extent. When it comes to the boost to business, the analytics of individuals’ private data serves as the basis for companies to design products or services that cater to every conceivable need.

　　However, the aforementioned benefits are not justified enough to represent the entire picture – while focusing on the blessings of data sharing, let’s not be oblivious to its repercussions for privacy security in the digital age. Based on this, the discussion can then move on to handle conundrums as to how to tackle the misuse of private information in virtual world, whether these be disturbed advertising or phishing mails, both of which take advantage of private data breach to locate vulnerable targets. To complicate matters even more, individuals’ privacy leak may be manipulated for unfair competition – companies obtaining people’s private data may win advantages in winning customers – it is from netizens’ browsing history or conversation record that companies predict the populace’s bias and therefore feed them marketing campaigns to influence their consuming preference.

　　From what has been discussed, it is my conclusion therefore, while personal data sharing online can be deemed as a blessing for business, its repercussion for the privacy security deserve equal consideration.

　　相关词汇和语法结构

　　Entrust  交付

　　Credibility  可信度

　　Conceivable  可想象的

　　Disturb  打扰

　　Netizen  网民